essay
I´m very afraid listening to my father shout and I get scared. Why? why was I so stupid as to eat the pudding? when he shouts it seems that the walls are moving!.
I´m desperate and i don´t know what to do. Why am I so selfish?, that pudding was for my mother and I ate it like a stupid boy, i didn´t realise how important that pudding was for my father and my mother. The first time that my father wants to give something to my mother and i spoil it.
Now my little brother is crying and it´s my fault. My father will beat us!!. Please god make my father not realise that the pudding is missing please father forgive us!!.
Good use of rethorical questions. Your piece shows how guilty this boy felt, but I still think you could have been more expressive when it comes to showing desperation.
ResponderEliminarThe reference to the father´s shouts also resembles the style of the story we´ve read.
Remember to capitalise the letter I when it refers to the first person.
Well done!
Satisfactory.